4th paragraph, 3rd sentence: replace 'query' ( a question) with 'quarry' (someone hunted). This pulled me out of the story while I tried to figure out what you meant. Other the that, I'm enjoying this story quite a bit.
Yes, another noted this as well and then my brain wanted to latch onto quarry as a pit in the ground from which stone is acquired rather than the other meaning. I'll be fixing this typo here shortly, but words like this show me why my friends with English as a second language have issues. I'm a writer with English as my first language and I have issues. Good thing my books have a team combing over them.
For series here, I'll do my best to edit and have things correct, but I'll definitely take the feedback about wrong words to 'why did the character do that?' or any other thing that jolts you out of the story rather than letting it flow for your enjoyment.
4th paragraph, 3rd sentence: replace 'query' ( a question) with 'quarry' (someone hunted). This pulled me out of the story while I tried to figure out what you meant. Other the that, I'm enjoying this story quite a bit.
Yes, another noted this as well and then my brain wanted to latch onto quarry as a pit in the ground from which stone is acquired rather than the other meaning. I'll be fixing this typo here shortly, but words like this show me why my friends with English as a second language have issues. I'm a writer with English as my first language and I have issues. Good thing my books have a team combing over them.
For series here, I'll do my best to edit and have things correct, but I'll definitely take the feedback about wrong words to 'why did the character do that?' or any other thing that jolts you out of the story rather than letting it flow for your enjoyment.