Her com beeped "How'd you get Hawkins... call me Rajim?"
"Ma'am, that is a secret... "
This part is very confusing. I can't follow who is talking, so I went back and forth trying to piece it together. I still can't figure it out. If Rejim is talking to Salindra, why the Ma'am? Wouldn't she be saying that to Rajim?
So far, I'm enjoying the story line. Most of it makes sense, but there's a few things that aren't clear. And one sentence that needs some editing--wrong words which are harder to find than misspelled ones, but I can't remember where. I was resting while reading!
Rajim is a guy who works under Salindra, who is now the head of information. Earlier, Hawkins promised he would not let anyone disturb her, but he let Rajim call on this matter. Rajim is being polite, but having a little fun before he launches into the intel he has to share. Salindra knows Hawkins is an admiral who runs a tight ship and if he says he will do something, he will do it. That is the underlying context that may not have come through well enough in this fun beta run of story sharing.
Her com beeped "How'd you get Hawkins... call me Rajim?"
"Ma'am, that is a secret... "
This part is very confusing. I can't follow who is talking, so I went back and forth trying to piece it together. I still can't figure it out. If Rejim is talking to Salindra, why the Ma'am? Wouldn't she be saying that to Rajim?
So far, I'm enjoying the story line. Most of it makes sense, but there's a few things that aren't clear. And one sentence that needs some editing--wrong words which are harder to find than misspelled ones, but I can't remember where. I was resting while reading!
Rajim is a guy who works under Salindra, who is now the head of information. Earlier, Hawkins promised he would not let anyone disturb her, but he let Rajim call on this matter. Rajim is being polite, but having a little fun before he launches into the intel he has to share. Salindra knows Hawkins is an admiral who runs a tight ship and if he says he will do something, he will do it. That is the underlying context that may not have come through well enough in this fun beta run of story sharing.
Yes, but that doesn't' explain why the reply to Rajim starts with "Ma'am" Isn't Salindra talking here?